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Sofia Hibbs, 8th Grade English Taking a Stand Essay |
Topic of the Week
Who is responsible for children's health? Target Words |
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-Students begin writing Taking a Stand essays. -Student-teacher writing conferences begin. -Teacher reads student work aloud, which prompts student to identify errors. -Teacher frequently refers to the rubric when conferring with students.
[clip length—2:09] STUDENT: I want to know if I use the three words correctly and if my— if I stated the conclusion. TEACHER: The conclusion, okay. So first we’ll look at the three sentences. STUDENT: ok TEACHER: Yes. Alright. “In addition, they should try to influence us to eat more healthy.” TEACHER: Instead of— you’re gonna say eat healthier? Or eat… STUDENT: Healthier. TEACHER: Yeah, let’s get rid’a— You can say eat healthy or eat healthier, but not more healthier. STUDENT: Eat healthy. TEACHER: Eat healthy. Okay? “Because one of the primary reasons why we don’t eat healthy is because we are influen—” Yes. Yes. Okay? So that’s one. “Another reason why schools should emphasize the importance of eating—” Yes. Fantastic. And then its because it would be helpful- “The importance of eating healthy and exercise is because it will be helpful towards the society— towards the society with obesity.” STUDENT: Towards society. TEACHER: Towards society. Okay. And society is suffering from or has a— a high population of people with obesity. This is fantastic. Yeah. Nice work. Okay? So now the second thing we wanted to check with our rubric is the conclusion sentence. “In conclusion, school is the most influential and supportive place to emphasize the importance of eating healthy and exercising more.” Okay? And in the beginning, you say, “In my opinion, schools have the most power to prevent many health problems.” So you stated here that you think it’s the school’s responsibility; and you’ve restated that in your conclusion. Mm-hm. Fantastic. TEACHER: Okay? TEACHER: You’re very welcome. TEACHER: I really, really appreciate those of you who are working quietly and working focused on your essay.
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